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I’m following on from last week with Rescue Operation. Here Roi is speaking first.
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“Wif and I weren’t there, but who else was missing? Derry and Kaia? Where—oh, no. Possible interspecies contact, and Derry’s the best xenotelepath we’ve got, and nobody else can touch Kaia on communications problems.”
“Get them back,” Emeraude said. “You can contact them, can’t you? Wif, too.”
Roi nodded.
But can they do anything?
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I think they’ll have to do more than contact them. Good story-telling through dialogue.
Like convince them this was deliberate?
I agree nice showing through dialogue. Great 8.
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I like using dialogue to tell the story when I can.
So do I. Sometimes words do speak louder than actions 🙂
Sometimes, especially dialogue words.
Tense situation shown well with great dialogue.
I try to make my dialogue realistic.
So natural within the dire situation. Super writing.
Thanks. I’m hoping I can get an agent on this one.
I wonder if he can regroup in time . . .
With Zhaim manipulating as he is?
True enough . . . 🙂
Roi is pretty clever, he’ll think of something!
But will it be enough? And in time?
Great tension. I believe Roi will think of something, I am just not sure it will be in time. Great 8.
This is the opening of a trilogy.
Great dialogue that introduces the other characters a bit. I’m really enjoying watching this develop.
At least some of the other characters. I try to introduce them in some depth one at a time.
Somehow I’m sure Zhaim has this contingency covered. Will be fascinating to see what unfolds next – great snippet, really creates tension.
The unfolding is going to take three books–this is just the setup.
It’s hard enough having relationships with earth men. I can’t imagine dealing with another species . . . although, sometimes I feel that we already are.
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Roi’s half human and half R’il’nian, though the R’il’nian genes strongly dominate in him. He’s a lot more empathic than most humans.
I think Roi can fix this mess. I like him.
Eventually, maybe.
cool — what’s a xenotelepath? whatever it is, sounds intriguing 🙂
A telepath who is expert at mental contact with another intelligent species. Roi can manage, but he’s no expert.
Such a powerful sense of urgency in just this little snippet. Great writing.
It is urgent.
Great tension! The short sentences really left me wanting more, but I felt they were very appropriate in conveying the situation. Well done.
You’ll be getting a bit more.
I’m going to guess that no, they can’t do anything. That there will be great trials before things gets sorted out. 😉
Well, it’s the setup for a trilogy.
So, you’re saying I’m right? 😉
Loved the dialogue and could totally feel the urgency. Well done!
Hope I can get it published.
The tension is so very vivid. Great 8.
Well, they are tense.
I think I’ve slightly lost the thread of what’s going on, but it sounds like they are scrambling to pull a team together to tackle the problem. Intense dialogue!
At this point, they’re just trying to make sure that all of the councilors who weren’t there know what happened.
Nice bit of dialogue. Sounds like there is a lot of trouble ahead, which could take a nice, long time to overcome.
Like a whole trilogy.
Sounds like a lot of interesting characters yet to be introduced. I like the sense of rallying the troops but it sounds from your comments that it’s probably too little too late. Very nice tension building here.
Oh, yes. The wives are minor in this one, though they’ll become important in book 3.
I agree, Roi is going to need friends on his side to defeat Zhaim.
Or at least people who see things from the same perspective as he does.