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I am still quoting from Rescue Operation, this time from Roi’s POV after his return from solving the problem of the planet convinced its health problems were an attack by others.
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Roi Laian stretched, feeling the interface lounge accommodate to his motion and gently massage his body as he shifted position. He opened his eyes, briefly interrupting the computer’s download to his brain as he absorbed what he’d already received. Plenty of decisions he wouldn’t have made if he had been here, but nothing really disastrous. Still, it was good to be back.
He glanced out the window wall of his office, taking in the rolling pastureland dotted with grazing horses. Swim, ride, or work out in the controlled-gravity gym? After he’d checked out the situations Zhaim had indicated were resolved, Roi decided, and reactivated the full computer connection.
The Horizon situation first, he decided, but he was only a few minutes into that when he jerked upright on the lounge.
I don’t think he’s favorably impressed by Zhaim’s solution.
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Thanks for the note at the end. I did wonder what had made him sit up so quickly. Great snippet.
Problem with breaking after 8 sentences.
Poor Roi is not going to like what he sees. I wonder if he is going to kill Zhaim over it, and how?
No. This is a place of laws, and the strictest ones are against killing another R’il’noid without a trial.
Happy to see the return of Roi. Now for the action. Wonderful eight.
And frustration.
Uh oh, I bet Zhaim’s going to be hearing from Roi! Lovely descriptive passage. It’s always easy for me to picture exactly what’s going on in your snippets.
I am wondering, though, about this phrase: ” Plenty of decisions he wouldn’t have made if he had been here”. I’m not quite sure what you mean there.
The Horizon problem is far from the only problem faced while Roi was gone, and quite a few votes have (in Roi’s opinion) been ill-advised. But these are ongoing problems. Horizon has been coded as “solved.”
I think his peaceful mood is gone for good now…was he ever wrong that no disastrous decisions had been made in his absence! Loved all the description early in the snippet, good stuff!
Yes, the medical problem was in a way a vacation for him.
Uh-oh. Something’s gotten his attention and it isn’t good. Nice cliff-hanger ending to the snippet.
Sheer chance–that’s where the 8 sentences landed me.
I knew that relaxed lounging about couldn’t last! Love getting the peaceful setting followed by the abrupt reaction. Great snippet.
He’s glad to be home where he can relax–until he finds out what Zhaim’s been up to.
Interesting peek into future possibilities, although I’m not so sure I’d want anyone downloading into my brain. I’d like to check out the controlled gravity gym. This was a fun read.
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Direct contact with the computer is as natural to Roi and reading and writing–or listening and speaking–are to us. The CG gym comes into Homecoming.
Nice descriptions. I can’t wait to see how Zhaim reacts to Roi.
Oh, Zhaim knows perfectly well how Roi will react.
To quote a song I haven’t heard in decades: “Whoop–there it is!”
Maybe Roi should start working to get that “No killing other R’il’noids, even if they’re evil scum” law revoked. See how Zhaim likes that . . . (I kid, I kid—and I can’t wait to see how Roi fixes this one!)
Or his father’s veto ability–but if anything happened to Roi, Zhaim would get that.
Yay, Roi’s back. He’ll sort this out.
Well, he’ll try.
Uh oh! And there it starts… If he believed nothing disastrous had transpired, that thought just went in the tank. 🙂 Your descriptive writing is excellent, Sue Ann. I’d really like to have one of those interface lounges. 🙂
Roi’s problem is he works within the rules.
Same on wanting an interface lounge! Now I can only wonder who or what made him jerk upright so suddenly…great snippet!
Go back and look at the last few weeks. And remember he’s getting caught up on what happened while he was gone.
Seems I am not the only one who wants an interface lounge, lol.
Your description was very effective, I found myself sitting up straighter just as Roi jerked upright.
Now if I could just figure out how to make an interface lounge….
How short a time he got to keep his ignorance! Nothing disastrous, indeed. Still, maybe knowing will help him get on the long road to fixing the mess. Or at least knowing that he’s losing control of the bad guy.
Long road is right.
Great descriptions. I particularly appreciate the way you set up the action at the end (Roi’s reaction) with the description of the peaceful view outside his office.
I started with his general relief at being home again.
Uh oh what had Roi so on edge? Your descriptions were so crisp and clear I could envision the entire scene.
Check the last few weeks of my snippets.
Oh no, something has his attention. It’s probably not a good thing, is it?
Think what he’s doing and the last few weeks of snippets.
The stuff’s about to hit the proverbial fan…I believe. Looking forward to next week’s snippet to see what made him react so.
With Roi as the fan.
What a fantastic lounge! I’d love to have one of those. Interesting snippet, Sue Ann.
Its main purpose is to ease direct mental access to the computer, but in order to do that it makes sure the body is comfortable.
Interesting! I’m curious what made Roi jerk out of his seat. Can’t wait to find out…
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Yawatta
Go back and check what Zhaim has been doing.
Love the suspense! I definitely want to know what has Roi jumping. I’m going to go back and read previous snippets, but this one definitely has me wanting more. Great snippet!
You should be able to figure it out if you read earlier snippets. Find them in “index.”
I’m not a huge fan of sci-fi and this definitely sounds like sci-fi to me. I do like the descriptions though and his actions are easy to follow. Good eight sentence snippet, I’d like to know what happens next!
A lot of people who don’t like sci-fi like my writing, perhaps because it is very much centered on the characters and on (disguised) problems of our times. From what I’ve seen, I’d count yours as sci-fi or at least fantasy.