It’s Sunday* again, and time for Weekend Writing Warriors (click on the logo above) and Snippet Sunday (click on the logo below.) Today I’m posting 8 sentences from my first published book, Homecoming available in a variety of formats from Amazon, Barnes and Noble and iUniverse.
This is a continuation from last week, with Roi as he is forced to relive a memory.
Snowy had learned so early that he could not remember learning that crying, struggling, or any expression but happiness or eagerness to please would bring uncontrollable pain. He knew how to keep his owners happy, if anything he did could manage that.
Still, he hated being a catamite. He wanted to strike out, and kick, and struggle, but he knew better than to think he could get away with it. So he hated and ran, head down and arms pumping as he returned along the balcony to the slave quarters.
Corner ahead – better slow down; one of the guards might be – was! – coming the other way. But neither his body nor the mind inhabiting it responded in the slightest to his concern. Horrified, he tried to rouse himself, knowing to the smallest detail what was to come, but helpless to do anything except to keep running until his lowered head slammed into the guard’s groin.
Not a good move for a slave.
*Oops, I scheduled this for Saturday instead of Sunday by accident, so you’re getting it a day early.
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It’s doubly horrifying to know what’s going o happen and be helpless to stop reliving it.
Excellent snippet, Sue Ann!
That horror was what I was trying to capture.
This has to be nightmarish for him…
Yes.
Interesting hints about how he isn’t in control of his own body…really skillfully done! Excellent excerpt!
Doubly. The hiControl has paralyzed his body in the present, and he can’t change what he did in the memory.
Roi is a good example (I think) of how children adapt to their situation to best survive. He did what he needed to do to survive with minimal pain inflicted as consequence of poor choices. Well done, Sue Ann 🙂
What a nightmare!
Nightmare and memory both.
How awful! Poor, poor Snowy!
It’s a memory of what made him try to block his owb instinctive reactions.
Oh wow…that guard’s going to be pissed…what a horrible memory to have to relieve.
relive…sigh (didn’t catch that till it was too late ; )
More than pissed.
o.O
(That is all. Just wide-eyed horror. Bad things are coming, poor kid!)
Yes, they are.
Uh oh, this can’t be good.
Nope.
Yikes! I can’t help but feel for both of them! Nice snippet!
It gets worse next week.
I really feel for him, poor kid.
Glad my writing got that across.
Not good! Now what will happen? The inner turmoil came through in this snippet. Great job!
Remember what he’s told Derik about his past memory of going out of control.
Uh oh…trouble for Snowy. Good job
That it is.
Ouch! That’s some very vivid action writing. Great snippet!
Glad you like it.
Ruh roh. He’s in trouble! Great snippet.
Well, they’re trying to find out why he blocked himself (incorrectly) against letting his talents get out of control.
Ugh. Very bad situation to be in. We’ll see what happens this week coming up. It can’t be good.
(Don’t mind me I’m catching up from the holidays.)
Two more hours til it goes live.