It’s Sunday again, and time for Weekend Writing Warriors (click on the logo above) and Snippet Sunday (click on the logo below.) Today I’m posting 8 sentences from my first published book, Homecoming available in all formats from Amazon, Barnes and Noble and iUniverse.
Roi, paralyzed and beginning to realize he is no longer a slave, has just returned from his first semester at boarding school. But has he understood what Nik, who has just arrived, tried to tell him before he left?
Nik, Derik ’pathed, unable to keep all of the anxiety out of his mind-voice, shouldn’t he have better muscle tone by now?
Nik looked up, startled, and walked briskly across to join them. “Here, Roi,” he said as he placed one of his hands on the boy’s and wrapped the other around Roi’s upper arm, “try to lift my hand.”
Derik was uneasy, but couldn’t analyze why. Nik’s face changed as Roi lifted his hand. “Here,” he said sharply, “let me see exactly what you’re doing.”
“Nik, don’t,” Derik started to say as his own awareness blossomed into real fear, but it was too late. He was thrown backward, chair and all, while Nik went flying toward the house wall and a volcano seemed to erupt inside his head.
What happened?
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Everything just exploded! Nicely done.
Exploded is right.
Frightening to say the least and yet something good may come of it. Fascinating eight, Sue Ann.
Well, Derik and Nik have a little better idea of what they’re dealing with.
No muscle tone, but his brain seems to be a power lifter! Terrific snippet as usual, Sue Ann.
Sheer power is not going to be his strong point, though.
Intriguing! Can’t wait for more!
Only have one more snippet planned for this sequence.
I love the way the characters interact in this situation. It’s a very compelling snippet. Well done.
I know these three pretty well, though Derik is one of those who kept changing my ideas of him.
His brain is doing all the work…intriguing. Seems like he needs to learn to control it.
And how!
This was one of my favorite scenes in Homecoming! Great use of the eights, Sue Ann.
Thanks, and glad you liked Homecoming.
Nicely done! Tense and intriguing.
At this point they’re all trying to understand what happened, including Roi.
Roi is certainly powerful – vivid scene! Another excellent excerpt from you, as always. I enjoy these characters…
And Roi’s not even 16 yet.
kinetic powers too? love this
Yes, but he’s not very good at control. And one of the problems with espers is that without being taught control, self-preservation has a way of taking over.
I want to know what happened, too. Great imagery!
At this point none of them are sure what happened.
Whoa, what just happened? Nik tried to do… something… and it ended really badly. Nice suspense build up!
Wait a couple of weeks.
Yes, I want to know what happened too.
The book is out.
Oh wow! Intense. Definitely want to know what happened. Vivid imagery. 🙂
So do they all!
Oh wow, they didn’t expect that and either did I ! I see his lack of control being a a good added element to the story.
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Neither did Roi.
Oh no! Good thing, bad thing?? Only way to find out is to come back next week 😉
Or buy the book. But I think I’ll stick with this scene for a few weeks.
The chair being flung and his head “exploding” caught me by surprise. Your last line was very apt. Good 8.
That’s from Derik’s point of view, of course.