I’m still posting from War’s End, and we’re in Coralie’s POV. She’s been forced to stand by while the other castaways improvise a tent against a rapidly approaching rainstorm, since her infant daughter was demanding to be fed – again.
Fumbled by her standards, she corrected herself, but the crude shelter at least kept them dry as the rain began in earnest. “Is this weather likely to be normal?” she finally asked.
Audi paused in her halting conversation with the Maung to study the information in the reader. “If we’re near the equator, yes,” she replied. “There’s an intertropical convergence zone, and it doesn’t move too much with the seasons because Rakal has less tilt than average. My guess is we’re in it, and we’ll get daily thunderstorms.” She had to raise her voice to be heard above the drumming on the sheet just over their heads.
Well, they have shelter from the rain, at least, if not from the heat.
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Another great snippet, l love your opening sentence!
That’s actually a continuation from last week.
Crude shelters and rain on the roof, I love it! Your snippets are always so visual! Whee!
Aural, in this case. 😉
I’m glad they’re in a shelter at least, even if not up to Coralie’s standards LOL. Can’t wait to see what happens next – you never disappoint!
Oh, they have quite a struggle ahead of them, but I’m not going to cover it all.
Sounds like they’ll have a long wet time of it in the crude shelter. Great snippet, Sue Ann
Who says they’re going to stay in the shelter?
Happy for shelter. LOL Great description.
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Rain with a small baby’s no fun, even if it’s warm.
“Drumming on the sheets” so well written I could hear it. (shudder). Good eight.
Thanks. Hope I can get it published some day.
They’re in a real predicament, and despite that threatening misery, they’re keeping their wits about themselves. They’ve got some tools and they’re resourceful. It’s great to watch them think their ways through this.
It helps that Coralie has wilderness background.
What a difficult predicament! This is a fascinating story and I’m looking forward to the next instalment.
This is one episode in a much longer story.
Glad they’re staying dry and cool. I also agree with one of the other comments: the opening sentence was a real hooker! Good job!
Cool–no way! This planet is hot! High-humidity jungle. I’ll have to make that clearer.
Shelter is good! Although tropical rainstorms can sometimes be a welcome relief from the heat 🙂 Hopefully they can find themselves more food next. Nice inclusion of information about the setting.
Even the rain is hot, and it makes the humidity worse.
This sounds very uncomfortable-rain plus heat.
Yes, it is.
There’s no situation that weather can’t make worse! Excellent as always, Sue Ann!
And as an atmospheric scientist, I’m going to make the most of it.
Any chance they can move away from that zone? Love the excerpt.
The Intertropical convergence zone? Figure that’s the n-s width of the Amazon or the rain-forest belt of Africa. And they have a month-old baby and an old woman as part of the group, and no transport except walking.
😦 sounds like Coralie is having (and will have) a miserable time of it – rainstorms every day and an infant. Difficult situation. Glad at least they have a bit of shelter now. 🙂
I’m going to reply to everyone at once because my main computer just went dead–won’t turn on–and I hate writing on the laptop. Susan, things will get worse. Brenda, thanks. Maggie, I try to feel what my characters are feeling. Karen, you’re getting too far ahead. Vivian, at least Coralie is used to coping. Ryan, Audi waited until the shelter was up (she had to help build it) but then immediately went back to conversing with the Maung.
Your snippets are always so vivid and amazing. I’m glad they are not getting wet and it seems like it’s not going to be easy. Can’t wait to see what happens next. Very good. 🙂
Very descriptive! Thanks for sharing!
A crude shelter from the rain– but will they stay put? lol I have a hunch they won’t stay for long. lol
They need to take strength from whatever they can, considering the circumstances. Thanks for sharing!
Nice set up depicting tension of the impending storm. I like that Audi is still trying to converse with the Muang during the preparations for the storm.
I felt so much better knowing that they found shelter. What a strange thing, how comforting it is–to be in out of the storm. Good eight, Sue Ann.
Made shelter, rather than found it. And I finally used the emergency shutdown (hold the on button) and then the computer turned on. Go figure.
Yay for a shelter!
Yes, no matter how crude.
Seeking shelter from the storm — nice! I liked how we learned more through the dialogue. Great descriptions – I was about to reach for my raincoat!!
Raincoats they don’t have. Just waterproof sheets–think poly sheets, or maybe those plastic tarps.
Oh yeah. I know what you’re referring to. Cool.
Glad they have shelter, but of course what’s the fun of reading something if everything is going well? Can’t wait for the next twist.
Yes, I often get accused of torturing my characters.
Heat and humidity/rain make for a brutal pair.
Yes, but that’s what they’re stuck with.