I’m posting more from War’s End today. The Maung has just confirmed that it knows trade talk, and Audi continues in her explanation to the Humans in the party.
“It’s a pretty primitive language, but there’s less chance of misunderstanding than with my trying to use their color language. Let’s see if I can get its name.”
Coralie moved a little nearer the center of the clearing and tipped her head back to look at the sky. Definitely threatening now, with low scud clouds moving fast against the higher overcast, and gusts of wind shaking the high branches. However welcome the movement of air was, she could not escape the feeling that it was about to start pouring. “Audi,” she interrupted, “couldn’t that wait until we rig some kind of shelter?”
This is the first Sunday of the month, so this post is signed up not only with Weekend Writing Warriors but also with Sky Warren’s Write Club. I’ll probably also get it listed on the facebook page.
By the way, I think I’ve just done something totally insane. I looked at my character list and glossary, and realized I had every letter of the alphabet except Q. (Query letter, anyone?) So I signed up for the A to Z blog challenge. If you’d like to find out more about my universe or meet my characters, drop by other days than Sunday in April. A to Z posts will go live at 6 pm Alaska time.
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I’ve seen the sky turn that way enough to know she’s right. Getting inside is a good idea. Great description!
It’s right from the view of an atmospheric scientist, too.
Priorities are good! Though I understand Audi’s excitement—this is a fantastic puzzle!
Right.
Loved your descriptions in this piece.
I’m just trying to describe what Coralie is seeing.
Coralie–is she the voice of practicality and reason, or the voice of fear?
Wonderful 8, Sue Ann.
Yay- on the A to Z! Good luck with it. 🙂
She’s practical enough to know that an unknown wilderness can be dangerous. I have 3 1/2 posts written already for A to Z, and topics for the other 22 1/2. It helps that I have characters named Xazhar and Zhaim!
I like the different forms of expression like color language.
But they need the reader for any form of communication.
I really like your description: “low scud clouds”–very nice. Great snippet!
Glad you like it.
I can feel the apprehension about those looming clouds, lovely description.
They’re part of the plot, not “It was a dark and stormy night”–and did you know those are the actual opening lines of an award-winning novel?
Time to go indoors. The vividness of this scene was awesome! Loved it.
What indoors? They’re in a clearing in an unmapped jungle.
I can feel the rain in the air – terrific description! These poor people – and maung – are really suffering…
They’re in a rainy area, though they’ll find out later it’s the end of the “dry” season.
Yes, I like her steady attention to their safety while the other action unfolds.
She’s the only Human with wilderness experience.
Shelter sounds like a very good idea. They can get to know each other later.
Priorities!
That’s all they don’t need now; inclement weather! I remember that opening “It was a dark and stormy night”, but not which novel it stems from. Isn’t it most often referred to as “Purple Prose”? Your prose is absolutely fascinating and I’m looking forward to the next instalment.
Madeline L’Engle, A Wrinkle in Time. It’s a cliche for bad writing now, but that’s the first sentence of this Newbery award-winning classic.
Uh, nothing worse than getting stuck in a heavy downpour. I’d definitely be thinking the same way. I can’t wait to read more. Oh, and the A to Z challenge sounds awesome. I’ll definitely drop in 🙂
I can think of plenty of worse things. But it’s definitely to be avoided if possible.
Shelter would be a good idea in this case, but me thinks Audi won’t agree.
I don’t think it’s occurred to Audi that she could get soaked.
I enjoyed the conflict between Audi’s intrigue in the Maung and Corralie’s concern for their safety. Lovely description of the weather closing in.
Not really conflict, just a different ordering of priorities.
Great descriptions. Sounds like they better find shelter soon!!
Find or make.
Your descriptions are spot-on. Nicely done!
Those are the descriptions of a meterorologist!