Once again I’m posting six sentences from War’s End, which is approaching professional editing. Bounce has just returned with Madame Irela (a diplomat who was traveling with the group) and left again to find Audi. Ginger is still trying to free Kelty.
The baby had dropped off to sleep again.
“Ginger,” Coralie asked, “are there other things we should avoid touching? And where are we? How did we get here?”
“Yes, Rakal, and it felt like we were teleported. Rather clumsily: the momentum and energy matching weren’t precise, though the mind-touch was very soft.”
But all Coralie really knows about Rakal is that something went terribly wrong there.
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Looks like they’re in even more danger than they first thought. Great hook: why are they there? Who/what teleported them there? Great 6.
You may have to wait til the book comes out for all of the answers, and that may be a while–I’m just starting the edits on the first volume of the trilogy, and this is the third. But the “who” question might be answered in the snippets if SSS goes on long enough.
Sounds very dangerous and pulls you into the story. Fantastic Six!!
Dangerous, all right.
We still don’t know quite what happened, but at least we’re starting to actively find it out. And the ideas of what might have happened sound quite scary.
The situation they were in on the ship was even scarier.
So if they were inexpertly but gently teleported, is it possible they were in effect summoned to help someone?
That’d be telling. Give me time to show you.
That was a great assessment of what happened!
“Silver spangles” was a direct reference to Coralie’s first sight of their surroundings, and this is a place (like equatorial Africa) where it rains just about every day. And they don’t know it yet, but they’ve arrived as the rainy season is just really getting started.
Curioser and curioser! They had better take care!
Definitely take care on a strange planet.
I’m so intrigued by everything that’s going on! Good luck with the editing. 🙂
Good–I want people to be intrigued.
I wonder what it is that they shouldn’t touch. Nice that Coralie has no idea where they are, which builds mystery. Interesting six.
Well, just on earth we have poison ivy, stinging nettles, glochids on some cactus….
There’s great potential in that soft mind touch. Nice six. Find Kristal Here
(Smile.)
Interesting snippet.
Poor momentum matching is why they arrived tumbling through the undergrowth. Ginger has identified the cause of that.
Your snippets always evoke danger and concern!
I suppose I write science fiction adventure–at least this excerpt.
Oh – a clumsy teleportation – why? who? So many questions! Great six!
They’ll figure that out.
Teleported??? Wow, that’s a whole new wrinkle and unexpected – I like the twist. This is such a fascinating story you’ve got going and I’m really invested in your characters. Great six again.
It’s nothing new in the book series, but it’s a rare ability. Ginger’s been teleported before so she knows the sensation.
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So many questions. Are they in danger? I’m sure you’ll let us know. Great six!!
They won’t be out of danger by January 27, I’m afraid. But I plan a longer excerpt on February 3 that will at least explain how they got there. If you want a hint take a look at Homecoming, the section where Derik is teaching Roi to teleport properly and the importance of energy and momentum matching.
Why am I hearing the theme from “Jaws” now? Are they about to fall out of the frying pan into the fire?
Don’t all authors do that to their characters?
Great snippet, Sue! “Rather clumsily: the momentum and energy matching weren’t precise, though the mind-touch was very soft.” Gets a lot of questions in the open 🙂 ! Nice job 🙂
Glad you liked it.