I’m still posting from War’s End, following on from last week’s snippet. Coralie was on a spaceship, but has suddenly found herself and her baby in a swampy jungle on a strange planet with no idea how they got there. Her dog has found her and managed to locate the pilot, who is hung up on a tree trunk. If you want to know how Coralie got Bounce, I posted an excerpt from the second book of the trilogy here last Thursday.
Coralie brushed some small flying creatures from Michelle’s head, adjusted the sling to hold the baby close while freeing her hands, and looked carefully around her. Signs of her tumbling progress to this point were obvious, now that she was looking for them and yes, there was her carryall, a splash of bright yellow amid the greens and browns that surrounded her. Just as well she’d chosen a bright one in reaction to the years of camouflage colors. She picked it up, turned toward Bounce’s position, and began to work her way in that direction.
She would have been happier with a stick to probe the ground in front of her and something to keep the flying creatures off, but the vegetation was either in chunks far too large for her to shift or too flexible to be useful. She had to test each step first by tossing the carryall ahead of her, holding the strap, and then with her feet, ready to jump back if the next step felt uncertain.
If I ever get it published, this will be the third volume of a trilogy set in our own time, but light-years away. At least this section is light-years away!
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Detail owes something to the first two books of the trilogy.
This is good. I like her ability to utilise what she has as a safeguard.
She’s well trained in survival. (The others aren’t.)
Well described. I can picture it beautifully.
Thanks. The footing, at least, can be found locally.
Ugh, computer issues last week. I did make it around to read, just wasn’t able to comment. Things all better this week so I can leave my “mark”. Good on Coralie for being “situationally aware” and adaptable.
Keep up the terrific work.
Argh! Still having issues with WordPress login. Cross fingers twitter works!
We get regular television programs on what to do if you’re lost/adrift in the Alaskan Wilderness/ocean, and I’ve used those. Coralie’s from a nomad culture where that kind of thinking is part of life.
Fascinating–that you get those programs, Sue. Another thing I’d never given thought.
Very descriptive, allowing the reader to be *right there*. Great job!
Thanks. I try to imagine what my character would see/her/feel/know.
Great detail, and a real sense of what it’s like to be Coralie, right there.Well done.
She’s a very self-reliant person.
Nice descriptions of the scene. Keep up the good work!
The scene is important to the plot.
very vivid details, you have an amazing world!
Actually, this is just one of the worlds in the trilogy.
I love all the detail, and what a great mother she is! I really feel like I’m watching her in action – terrific six!
Glad it’s not too slow for you.
Fantastic detail. I can picture it in my mind. Lots of luck in having the third volume of a trilogy published!
I don’t even have the first one published yet.
My dog would love to take Bounce’s place. He loves small flying objects. Great six!
Like insects? So far Coralie hasn’t seen Bounce go after any.
Beautifully descriptive!
Well, you have to be careful traversing an unknown swamp.
I really enjoyed this weeks six…you did an amazing job with description and painting the scene.
Mostly imagination, though there are places in Alaska that can swallow a horse.
I love how practical she is about this—not a bit of panic!
Lots of survival training, plus she’s too focused on the baby to fear for herself.
She’s got a level head. It’s enjoyable to hear her voice as she navigates this trying time. Nice six!
Wonderful Sue. The details paint a vivid image of the scene! 🙂
I think recognition and inventory are the first two steps. Coralie’s on those right now. Water, shelter and food come next, followed by signals (which in this case is not such a good idea) and play. I’ll have to write them down next time one of those programs comes on–right now the segment in the weather program is on wildfire. (I used that in the second volume of the trilogy) and it’s about the time of year for the avalanche segments (used in Homecoming.)
I can see this perfectly. Great work! (and I’m running a day late for SSS)
Thanks. I hope to get this edited soon.
I enjoyed your snippet, very descriptive. I am also curious to read more and any past posts I have missed.
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Your descriptions are so vivid and well detailed!