Welcome back, Sixers. I’m going to post something today that is completely different from what I’ve done before, though still in the same universe. This is from the third book of the trilogy, working title War’s End — though I hope I can come up with a better title before publication. This is roughly halfway through the book, and a moment before this scene, Coralie is on a spaceship.
She had to protect the baby. Coralie tried to make a rigid shield of her body and arms as she rolled through wet, foul-smelling greenery, punctuated by harder masses that might have been tree trunks or rocks — she was too confused to tell. Around her, familiar voices cried out in shock, and somewhere a dog yelped. What had happened? This wasn’t the ship! The uncontrolled tumble ended with a blow that drove the breath from her lungs, and for a moment she could see nothing but colored flashes as she struggled for air.
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She’s pregnant! That’s a horrible situation to be in. Very tense.
Actually, she was pregnant until a month ago. Here she has her newborn daughter in her arms. (Hope this doesn’t show up twice; wordpress isn’t playing nicely this morning.)
Phew, very intense, beautifully dealt with.
I try to balance intense scenes with more relaxed, even funny ones. Like the problem of diapers in the wilderness.
Wow that’s intense! Great six … i wanna know more though!
Tune in next week.
Wow! Great description that really shows the action, too. Good job!
Thanks. I’ve started Blood Moon, BTW.
Wow, I can really feel her worry for protecting the child, and I think you capture the fragmented feeling of being catapulted into a catastrophe (not sure what’s happening but I feel the tension). Great six!
Glad you like it. I may continue this scene for a bit.
But…she can’t go unconcious. What about the baby? It’s not fair. You…you writer you. 😉
I didn’t say she was actually unconscious, just had her breath knocked out and saw stars.
Very exciting scene!!
Thank you. I’m looking for a beta reader on the trilogy.
Nice six! Very tense!
Good–I intended it to be tense.
Love your six! It has it all… action, tension, a baby to protect, an unexpected change in her surroundings… very exciting. 🙂
Wait til she finds out where she is!
Intense six, Sue Ann. I’m intrigued.
Glad you like it.
Oh, but where’s the baby? Yikes. Very suspenseful.
Come back next week.
Wonderful description! Very intense six 😀
Think I’ll stick with Coralie this month.
Wow, that’s some space ship! I wonder if she’s not hallucinating somehow.
Not hallucinating.