I’m going to continue from last week’s snippet from Tourist Trap, again to emphasize what Derik wants Roi to strip from his memory and put into storage a couple of hundred years later. Note that Zhaim is Roi’s half brother.
Zhaim could not have been expecting anything but cowed obedience or flight. When Roi launched himself at his half-brother, the older R’il’noid stood frozen for long enough that Roi’s hand was firm on the beamer as they fell together. All that Zhaim had done to him and to the people he loved most came flooding into his mind, and his whole being exploded into an inferno of rage. He fought for control of the beamer, slamming the stock repeatedly into Zhaim’s shoulder when he couldn’t get it into his brother’s face, using teeth and knees relentlessly. He was ready to kill his brother as that brother would have killed his friends, slowly, savoring every bit of pain he could wring from his helpless victim.
Then he felt Timi’s delayed shock, and his left arm was grabbed and twisted behind his back.
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I really enjoyed this work. A great six to show the quality of your writing. I highly recommend reading the whole book.
Thanks.
Ok, I understand the memory wiping bit now but I seem to have missed whether Zhaim had his memory of those past things stripped or not. Or does that come up later?
I really like the way you’ve handled this scene. The details are wonderful. Great six!
Derik and those who’ve wiped their memories of Zhaim only had the scene 2nd hand, though Roi’s and Zhaim’s memories. Zhaim was given an artificial conscience that resulted (originally) in convulsions when he even thought of harming another, but he resented it and wasn’t about to wipe any memories.
Wow, that is an intense memory! I can see why Derik would want it wiped and why Roi wants to keep it…
Question is, can Roi continue to stand up against everyone else accusing him of paranoia?
Wow. I can see why Derik doesn’t want that one, but in a way, I’d think Roi would be hesitant to do so… Interesting six this week!
Think I’ll post 6 more from this scene, and then go back to WIP. or possibly a scene from one of the shorter things I’m thinking of trying out with DIY e-publishing.
Oh wow, the violence was well described. Many questions – intriguing six!
This one’s from a published book, though I wish the price was lower.
Intense six. I’m impressed with your ability to write a violent scene, it’s not nealy as easy as some people think. Nice job.
Thanks. Tried to post on yours, but it’s one of those that won’t let me.
Wow! Intense six!
The memory of the violence of which he is capable is going to have as strong an effect on Roi as his memory of Zhaim.
So much rage and unresolved issues going on with characters. Nicely done.
Roi has gone out of control two times before this. First time he killed a man (in self defense) as a small child; second time he nearly killed two friends–both in Homecoming. So this memory becomes important to him, as a warning as well as what Zhaim was once like.
Wow, very violent snippet. Nice job 🙂
I don’t do a lot of violence, but when I do I want it to count.
Interesting concept. Love how you weave the details together with such vivid description.
Wow, it’s all kicking off! great description!
Ouch! Great action here.
Zhaim deserved more than he got.
Darn, foiled!
Wow, that’s a lot of fight scene in six sentences. (I’m studying fight scenes lately, from hand-to-hand up through naval battles). Nicely done.
To be honest, I don’t know enough about fighting to write one. Besides, I tend to skip over them reading, so why not just give the essentials? In this story, it’s the fact that Roi totally loses control.