Shadows crept across the wall.
Richard didn’t see them, at first. He was too sunk in the stark reality of the agricultural reports before him, too chilled in a building built for solar heating.
He buried his face in his hands. Who knew for certain how it had started? A volcano, atomic bombs, a meteorite strike? All had been discussed, but it was impossible to tell rumor from truth. Even the reports, with their sentence of mass starvation, were late and scanty.
All he was sure of was that the sun was gone, hidden behind a pall of dark clouds, and he wasn’t even sure whether those clouds were ash, smoke or water. That, and the fact that without the sun, no crops could be grown.
He threw his head back and opened his eyes, looking upward in some half-remembered impulse toward prayer. His vision started to sweep past the shadows, stopped. Shadows?
The image of tree branches?
Scarcely daring to hope he turned to look at the window, uncovered to let in what little light remained, and saw the sun. Feeble, to be sure, but there, returning. Crops would grow again.
His eyes filled with tears, and everything faded.
Platform-Building Challenge #1 is the following:
Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
end the story with the words: “everything faded.” (also included in the word count) Yes.
include the word “orange” in the story No.
write in the same genre you normally write Yes, science fiction.
make your story 200 words exactly! Yes, if I counted right.
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Wow! Good job! 😀 You nailed it!
Oh my gosh, I love it! Sounds like a very cool story that I’d like to read more of!! Great job!
I’m entry #19
It’s so nice to see a story that ends on a happy note ^_^ A lot of the entries end with people dying.
I’m #109.
Whew! The sun’s still there. LOL (had to check) Kidding. Nice entry. I enjoyed reading it.
Melissa Maygrove
Campaign Entry #149
Good story and very well written!
Hi! I wanted to let you know you’ve moved on to the next round of judging! Great job!
Some great stuff here… you do a fab job of letting us see the story through Richard’s eyes. Nice! 😀
Great writing. I loved this piece.
Wow, did I copy something very wrong here…so sorry. I was trying to say….
I was beginning to wonder about the shadows with no sun. Good way to round it all out! I really enjoyed this piece. Thanks for sharing. And so, so sorry about the 1st comment. Don’t know what came over me! 😀
#189
I trashed the first comment after reading the second. I go 6 weeks with no shadows because the sun never gets high enough to shine in my south windows, so for me shadows imply a light source. I assume the spider comments were aimed at another piece.
Terrific entry, Sue!
A farmer’s prayer. Great detail and emotion.
Ohh! I liked that! Great job!
Great challenge story! I like how you made the shadows the key point, the proof of sunlight and salvation, but the main character didn’t notice their significance until after you’d explained the problem. Well done!