For quite a while I’ve been blogging Chapter 2 from a WIP, tentatively titled Rescue Operation. That Chapter is now complete. I skipped Chapter 1 on the grounds that it was an unholy mess, but I think I finally have it straightened out. So for the next few weeks I’ll be giving six sentence segments from Chapter 1, starting with the beginning of the chapter, the book, and the trilogy. Please leave comments, letting me know how this works as an initial hook.
Roi Laian jerked upright on the interface lounge. “Oh, no,” he gasped aloud. “He can’t be that stupid. The Council can’t be. Is he trying to start a revolution?”
Lelani, the oldest of his three wives, hardly lifted her wrinkled face from the wire and beads that would become a new hair ornament, but Keishala turned toward him, lowering the musical score she had been studying.
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wow! very tense. sounds like a winner.
Intriguing!
Love the tension! Can’t wait to get the full scene 🙂
If this is the opening for chapter one…it’s definitely an attention grabber. Wondering who is going to start a war has me curious.
Yes, intriguing – a different world, you hint at extreme outward conflict, and three wives is a setup for conflict as well. 🙂
Actually, the wives get along fine–they age, he doesn’t, so they are generally a good portion of a generation apart. Lelani, for instance, is in her 70’s.
Yes, works well as a beginning. Full of questions. 🙂
Very interesting world you’ve created 🙂
Yep, great beginning!! Love reading your snippets.
Wow. Very interesting. Why doesn’t he age? I think the 6 work well!
Roi is R’il’noid, a human-R’il’nian hybrid, and the R’il’nai do not age. They can be killed, and their reproduction is very slow (R’il’nian women ovulate about once a century) but they don’t age beyond adulthood. Many R’il’noids, Roi among them, inherit the non-aging trait. This problem of the relationships between aging and non-aging individuals is one of the conflicts that is in the background of all my science fiction.
Interesting start, not sure the ageing thing is fair on the wives as he doesn’t.
That’s one of the tensions throughout the trilogy.