Here’s the start of a scene from the first book of the trilogy I’m working on. Drafts of all three books are finished, but they still need work.
“Am not a baby, ‘n neither is Tammy,” Tod stated truculently, head tipped back to look up at Callan. His dislike wasn’t just because Tod was eleven and small for his age, while Callan was a well-grown fifteen, a budding sports hero and the son of the wealthiest politician in town. Callan was just a little too used to getting anything he wanted. Tammy was almost as afraid of him as she was of their father, and Tod trusted his twin sister’s instincts.
“Shut up, both of you,” Buck said tiredly. “Tod may be small, but he’s the best scout we’ve got and far and away the best rider.”
This is science fiction, but the scene takes place on a relatively primitive planet. Like the scene with Amber, I’ll do the whole scene in six-sentence bits.







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Beautifully written, I love the tease you have used with this story.
Very good dialogue!
Great set up of characters! Sounds like another great read. I do miss Tourist Trap 🙂
Tourist Trap is now available from Amazon or Barnes and Noble in print and e- formats, as is Homecoming. I am looking for reviews.
Interesting
You’ve really drawn the characters very nicely here.
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A very strong personality shone through here. I’m liking Tod.
Lots of characterization in these few sentences. Good job!
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You have intrigued me 🙂 Please continue next week!